EngineerGirl Writing Contest Finalists | 2021-2022
Hello Richard Kim,
I am very pleased to inform you that Audrey Kim’s submission, “The Wonderful Sleeping Bag-like Incubator, Embrace, helps Babies who are Premature and Live in Countries that are in Poverty,” has been selected as a finalist in this year’s EngineerGirl Writing Contest! While this does not guarantee that your child will receive a cash prize, it does mean that the essay rose to the top among the hundreds of essays that were submitted. Each year we ask students to write about a different engineering-related topic. We receive hundreds of submissions each year from students around the world, so Audrey’s selection as a finalist is exceptional.
Here are just a few things that the initial judges had to say about Audrey’s essay:
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Great essay, highlighting one-way poverty is correlated to infant mortality and an invention that will help improve it.
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This essay did a great job of illustrating the problem and providing a detailed engineering technique to help solve that problem. Very well-written as well.
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Well written interesting essay
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good understanding of the product described; the product focuses on affordable technology to address a health problem.
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This essay does an excellent job of explaining the motivation and circumstances for this technology being needed. I might have hoped for more content on the technical merits and description of how the device works, but overall, nicely done.
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We will contact you again after the committee meets to let you know the results of the final judging. If your child is selected as a winner, we will also request a non-copyrighted digital photo for use on the website and contact information for your school and any local news venues that you would like to be notified of the award.
Thank you and congratulations!
Mary Mathias
Associate Program Officer
National Academy of Engineering
I am very pleased to inform you that Audrey Kim’s submission, “The Wonderful Sleeping Bag-like Incubator, Embrace, helps Babies who are Premature and Live in Countries that are in Poverty,” has been selected as a finalist in this year’s EngineerGirl Writing Contest! While this does not guarantee that your child will receive a cash prize, it does mean that the essay rose to the top among the hundreds of essays that were submitted. Each year we ask students to write about a different engineering-related topic. We receive hundreds of submissions each year from students around the world, so Audrey’s selection as a finalist is exceptional.
Here are just a few things that the initial judges had to say about Audrey’s essay:
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Great essay, highlighting one-way poverty is correlated to infant mortality and an invention that will help improve it.
**************
This essay did a great job of illustrating the problem and providing a detailed engineering technique to help solve that problem. Very well-written as well.
**************
Well written interesting essay
**************
good understanding of the product described; the product focuses on affordable technology to address a health problem.
**************
This essay does an excellent job of explaining the motivation and circumstances for this technology being needed. I might have hoped for more content on the technical merits and description of how the device works, but overall, nicely done.
**************
We will contact you again after the committee meets to let you know the results of the final judging. If your child is selected as a winner, we will also request a non-copyrighted digital photo for use on the website and contact information for your school and any local news venues that you would like to be notified of the award.
Thank you and congratulations!
Mary Mathias
Associate Program Officer
National Academy of Engineering
